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Overall, I liked the idea of the poem. It needs some structural work in the "writer" section. and you have WAAAAY to much punctuation. Poetry is not a book that ...

She walks in like the dead air Musty and still, nothing there She smiles, the light bursts… Yet dies in an instant She asks about the tree Cut down last ...

Once again Gaylegoh, your exact and extensive comments have helped me greatly and I would love to answer your questions. 1. Why the setting? -Basically, its simple. I like that ...

Wow that was extremely good... You have an interesting style that I don't could be rivaled or copied. I like the part about the squirrel...:) Keep writing!!! I would love ...

You've got more than a handful of names, Drew Morrison being the most prominent, and yet the town is 'nameless.' the reason the town is "nameless" yet everyone in that ...

Very very good, deep and makes you think... A few things [qoute] Or the grave we dealt? [/qoute] im not sure but is it supposed to be graves? I like ...

Your poem is extremely good, very moving I only found one issue Then one day came the war. this line doesnt really flow with the rest of your lines It ...

Down in the valley In a small, quiet town The wind rolls lazy Through broken windchimes The shops and the stores Are open but empty And a few people walk ...

Hey guys I'm new! Just uploaded a quick poem and Im ready to go!

There sits a man, short in size Who plays his game Of Kings and Queens At the coffee house There stands a man, behind the counter Who serves his scents ...