miyaviloves

Well, i thin kthat all has been said has been said with this one, I loved it! Im glad i read part four and came back to read the rest ...

Ok I have not read the other parts of this, but I will go back and read those after! panting heard hard? Kristie looked at her knife before putting it ...

ireally enjoyed reading this, just one line however bothered me: "and bash" the word bash does go with thrash yes, but I just don't think its fits in really with ...

If you spaced this out it would be much easier to read, you might get a few more reviews that way :) Anyway... His bloody corpse and mangled body lay ...

I have to agree with Write Me, it is a little too repetative for my liking. Repetition in poems can work realy well, But I hate to say that I ...

I agree with Adam_Atlantian, that I don't think it's the same person talking in the first chapter. I didnt think it was flimsy...but you caould add some more details here ...

It seems really sweet in the beginning, with the tea on the lace cloth and stuff, and also sad. Then it got creepy with Corrie! I'm now off to read ...

Aww that was a sweet poem. I love watching the snow, it's so peaceful :) and it also causes trains to be delayed/cancelled so I don't have to go to ...

This sounds like an interesting introduction for a story. I think howvere you could be a little more descriptive, and vary in your choise of words. fove - five?? :) ...

Once upon an ancient past a seed was buried and from that very seed sprouted a sapling. The tree grew large and tall, a true giant. One day a forceful ...

Whey this is good for second person! I can't write second person, and usually don't like reading it. But you have made it work well. It's a good concept, will ...

Another great piece here! Remember, Jamie should know ahead of time who these witnesses will be. Witnesses are tricky in court cases, as from what i have learnt in Law, ...

We had to do something like this in my creative writing class! I like this :D its simple but cute? It greats a great image of your desk and the ...

Your writing is good, but i must say Panic! at the disco??? Lol sorry not one of my favourite bands. Anyway, back to the writing, are you going to do ...

Hmm this wasn't as good as your other pieces, i guess not much really happened..you had a lot os she said mom said's in there, you could vary that out ...