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D-Listers “Hey Raphie, do mind if Nick and I talk about what our favourite thing to do today was?” “Why sure Sean,” Raphie replied, “it sure would be a fun ...

I'm pretty new to the forums here, but this is by far the best thing I have read. Wow. The premise is great. The dialog as well. I wish I ...

I think that that story really has the potential to make people "wow" at the end, but in the current form, it just didn't do that for me. I definitely ...

That was really creative. I really liked the conversations of the hangers. The characterizations were all done very well. I thought the end could be improved though. For 90% of ...

Firstly, I know that the last story I posted here was also a sort of conversation with a therapist. I guess I'm just posting what I like of mine, and ...

Overall, short, but good for how long it was. I think it could work really good as something inside a larger piece where we know the narrator better. There were ...

D'oh. I mixed up the names I guess. Well I edited the story and fixed the naming thing and now its all "James". Thanks for the critique.

My eyes didn't leave the screen once reading that story. The first sentence which may have been a bit cliche, but who cares? The "assaulted possum" bit is great. I ...

I found one small error The next week I showed up with nothing on me but my fake ID and a small hammer in my pocket" Wow. Amazing work. I ...

A Matter Of Time The following is a series excerpts from conversations with a psychiatrist who had private sessions with three members of one family. A mother, and her two ...

That was really good. Overall, I liked it. I agree with the previous comment that there might be a few ideas to expand upon such as what Crusher looks like ...

I really liked that. Normally, this isn't the kind of story I would enjoy at all, but it was great. I really love the voice of the whole thing. The ...

Hey, I'm an American living in London, and I would like to add that just because the British don't celebrate the 4th of July doesn't mean they miss out on ...

I think that this really should be a longer piece. I mean sure, flash fiction can be great, but if the reader were more connected to the character, then the ...

My ideas came come from anywhere, the idea my first novel (which I am currently in the middle of editing), came from personal experience, but then from that base I ...