mikerbuddy1

Hey storyweaver, thanks for reviewing "cast in fire". When you have time, could you look at the revision and tell me what you think? I would really appreciate the help! ...

Ok. Here is a revision of the original Cast in Fire. If anyone has suggestions or believes that something changed should go back, please let me know. Also, I will ...

I agree with the above posts about being a work in progress. There is definitely potential here. The rhetorical question to start the poem is a nice way to state ...

Hello. This is my first post for YWS. Please read and review. I will also read and review yours. Thanks. a lonely soul in scattered thought twisting chains he'd long ...

Too many adjectives. They interfere with the story. Also, far too many metaphors. (Katana, hobbit, himalayas, Bob Marley, piranha, vampire etc...) You come off as trying to please, trying to ...