mikepyro

Dedicated to my cousin Branden and his patents, all they've gone through. Phone's ringing. What time is it? 3:00 am. Who the hell's calling at 3:00 am? "Hello?" "Mr. Krenshaw? ...

Quite nice. I didn't find as many grammar issues as I expected, most have been pointed out. I think you need to fix your punctuation. You use alot of unnessesary ...

This is quite solid as a piece of poetry. So often rhymes trip the reader up and feel forced but here I feel they flow quite well together. The style ...

I disagree. Catcher in the Rye, Dean Koontz's Seize the Night, The Shining, Cujo all had white or silver covers. Personally I think the white pulls attention to the piece. ...

not sure what ranger's talking about, I found a ton of python like touches. randomness and subtly odd flow well together here, I really enjoyed the further descriptions to another ...

honsetly I find that it's so hard to find good poetry here, good poetry that flows and can use a rhyme scheme that doesn't make me want to punch my ...

gotta agree the spelling, grammar, structure all fall short here. I've heard this piece 100 times before and it gets worse each time you read it. there's no real depth ...

much of the editing necessities have been covered but I must note that when you employ He Said She Said at the end of a dialogue line the line should ...

It's a solid piece told in a unique style. I admit some points don't flow as well such as the Reign of terror. They read half life prose and half ...

The second set of stanzas is where the stanza really shines. There's an anger and sorrow mixed that avoids cliche and melancholy quite well. As a lyrical piece I can ...

Be warned ahead of time there is strong violence and language in the first half of the piece, so know ahead of time and please don't complain about it in ...

It's a lovely idea, and you bring to life some wonderfully unique and humorous characters. I do have to agree with Hannah that while very interesting the characters aren't truly ...

Id forgotten how much I loved your humor in the almost 2 years I've been away. Simple, sweet, and deliciously silly. It's hard to make flash fiction comedy really work ...

Not bad at all. A sly sense of humor throughout. Though I think the letter could be tonned down a bit, a lil too silly in comparison with the rest. ...

Overall a solid piece. The main draw is the character. There's a wry, dry humor about em that enhances the sereal nature of the world around. The voice and style ...