mikepyro

It's a solid piece. I love the theme and the story overall. I must say though that I don't feel much connection to any characters aside the main one, they're ...

appreciate your review The Yellow Sheets (Romance Story, be aware it will make you sad) Always look forward to people telling me how awesome I am. And good luck with ...

I always look forward to people telling me how awesome I am :D I'd appreciate a review on either of these, and will return the favor of course on weeked ...

(Still trying to figure out how to post it from word with tabs, not working for some reason, but please don't let it disuade you. It truly is an excellent ...

Our fourth session. “Have you been drinking again, Mr. Barrow?” “A little.” “How much is a little?” “It's enough.” Eyes red. Shining. The crunch of leather as he sits, adjusting ...

I like it, but it's hardly a prologue. It's more like a blurb. Overall I could see you developing a strong tale around this idea and I'd wish you bet ...

I enjoyed it, which is something I rarely say f stories of this type. It's a strong voice that remains present throughout and a nice use of vivid imagery, which ...

It's as if the piece is written by two people. I loved the last half, the flickering hand that dies, the last 7 limes are brilliant, haunting, and subtle as ...

It's well witten enough with a decent flow and solid structure, but just a tired theme. If one takes on suh a theme it must be told through a unique ...

Many thanks you two, glad you enjoyed it! :D

My father was buried today. It was a quiet affair. The build up to the ceremony wasn’t particularly suspenseful as we’d been expecting it some time. Not many people came. ...

oh my god this is so much better than most junk poems on here! :D proffesional, powerful, sublime. very very good. i will say the overuse of the exclamation points ...

Well its certainly better than most first story pieces, but it needs alot of work. You jump around far too often, your characters aren't well developed and you switch from ...

Story of the yellow fever outbreak that took place in the late 1800s in new York city. So many died that when it rained the sheets used to wrap the ...

It's cute, sweet I guess. I can't take it seriously as it isn't really a poem or even a fully realized humor piece, it's just a witty anecdote. That's nice, ...