mikepyro

hadn't ever --- had never a week, towards ---- cut the comma though, bored ----cut comma shifted uncomfortable --- uncomfortable she chuckled. A soft low chuckle that scared Jagger terribly ...

John wakes to the sound of Jane’s voice. A sweet melody flows from her lips. She sits in the cubby beside the windowsill with her cheek pressed against the cool ...

John enters Haven. A large sign on rusted hinges rocks with the wind as he passes beneath. The town is not unlike the others, half empty and quiet. No church ...

“Who are you?” “I am God.” “And I?” “You are the servant.” John stands alone in a shadowed hallway. A towering figure of light forms in the distance. “What do ...

I must say your shading is phenomenol. Not just the shading, but the mixing and blends of colors (especially in the second colored picture. It's a shame that everything is ...

Not bad. There are parts I will discuss before I get to the positives. Ok- always spell as okay in literary fiction the use of italics shouldn't exist in a ...

I'll admit I'm not one for drawing or art (but I am a master of the stick figure technique) but I figured I'd give it a try at a review. ...

quite good. It's very...different. I like that. It's not like many other pieces either in style or form and there's an almost lyrical quality to the piece that I really ...

John’s horse gallops through the prairie. He squints past the sun and off into the land beyond. From ahead a large structure emerges, its darkened form standing out against the ...

The desert sun beats down upon John. He swallows the last of his water and lets his canteen drop. His supplies are empty, left to the orphaned boy in Fairfield. ...

John stands alongside his steed and watches the dying sun spill over the hills. Dustbowls thrash around his form. Ahead lays Fairfield, its foundries built upon the dry earth. A ...

John sits alone in the middle of the desert road shivering under the bundle of blankets Paul packed. A crimson fire crackles before him. He spears a slice of dried ...

this really ain't bad. You made me think I'd have to tear it apart and now you make me sad I don't get to do that :( I agree the ...

Thanks guys, glad you enjoyed it. And thanks to all my readers for your support and reviews. :D

A rewrite of an older piece I posted here, one that was ironically plaigerized by a writer here. This actually led me to joining this site. And yes, I realize ...