midnightsky

I absolutely LOVE the idea of your poem, however at some point, the main idea of the poem becomes a little confusing... It starts off great but as it unravels ...

Loved the lyrics, great job!!! Continue creating songs, but next time add a little more rhythm and rhyme, which will make your Chorus a lot more interesting to read... Chorus ...

Loved the lyrics, great job!!! Continue creating songs, but next time add a little more rhythm and rhyme... - Midnight

Immensely touching, however their are some grammar mistakes, and it takes a while to actually understand the concept of the text. Great idea though! Not to mention the fact that ...

There was an ear-splitting scream, as I tumbled to the ground holding my hands to my chest trying to stop the blood. I heard the distant echo of my knees ...

I absolutely LOVE the concept of the story, however there are some slight mistakes and things that you can improve mildly to create a more tense and nerving environment. Some ...

Extremely touching, truly amazing the emotions are very visible, but I have to admit some of the metaphors are quite peculiar, like a vegetable being chopped....? Otherwise great job! :D ...

Amazing! Truly and utterly amazing! I absolutely loved it- some of your best work... - Midnight

Extremely well written! However you should add a little more tension to the scene to make the readers' anticipation increase immensely while reading! Love the concept and the idea of ...

This is a great story! Next time instead of having that one piece as one entire chapter, it should be two instead and then you won't have as much detail ...

Really good, no mistakes at all! Next time give a description of the room or the area around the character, for the reader to imagine everything to its fullest extent... ...

Done very well, with great and exquisite detail. Your ideas are very creative and imaginative, can't wait to see the story unravel.

Thank you! I really hope you enjoyed it! - Midnight

Starry Night Chapter One… It was a dark, starry night. I could hear absolutely nothing; only the strong drumming of my heart assured me I was still alive. Lying absolutely ...