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I liked it and it was very descriptive and it kept my interest. However, the fact that you had to tell us that she didn't have a twin wasn't good. ...

This is really good just make sure that you seperate the paragraphs. The paper I had been holding fluttered to the ground as I stood there frozen showing no signs ...

It's good but you should always read over your work. Not just once but many times to fix any errors because there are quite a few. Also, I had some ...

Thanks so much. I tried super hard on this story. I'll fix the beginning. It means a lot that you liked it.

Wow, I really loved this. It was so sad and it almost reminded me of a short story I once wrote. Not nearly as wonderful as this poem was. I ...

This is my story "Positive" it is edited with more detail. I'm always looking to improve so tell me what to improve. :D ------------------------------------------------------------- I opened my eyes s

You're not being to harsh. I like to know how to improve. I might edit and re-post soon so. I don't know for sure.

Good concept with good writing style. You do need to add comments to some parts. There was only one part in particular that stood out to me that needed fixing...maybe. ...

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I believe that to improve this story you would need to add much more detail. Add more of what the puppy is thinking. I wondered about his emotions, was he ...

How am i to keep living with such a secret? Secret was spelled wrong so I fixed it. She hears cries at night, for I can't cry at day.Oh how ...

Great story so, on with the review!!!! His shoulders were thin, even under the coat she had insisted he wear the new angles were accented. I just added a comma, ...

I was really down today so I read your poam. I started cracking up. It was so funny! The part about how you didn't take your medication made me laugh ...

that was a really cool song!! i really liked it and I think you should write more because you have obvious talent at songwriting. It's funny because I could never, ...

That was really good. I like your writing style and the words you use. I wish that maybe you could've desribed the school maybe a bit more. Rose seems like ...