mfoley

Thanks! And you're right about the father. I'm trying to make it fit better without upping my word count too much.

Thank you so much!

I appreciate it!

Thank you so much for that!

I really liked it, but it needs some work. I'll start with the negative, then move to the positive. I would revise the title to "I Survived the Fog" rather ...

Is this just an excerpt? Either way, this has potential, but needs quite a bit of expanding, and refined dialogue. "I'd was wondering if you would like to accompany me ...