melodicatastrophe

This is a rant, a random uneeded and time-wasting sort of thing that needs loads of help if you want to make it readable. I suggest rewriting it totally, then ...

Wow, for me, the meaning of this poem is quite obvious. But that could be just me (I wrote the poem, didn't I?). This poem is about living in the ...

I really liked this. It was quick-paced and cute, although it needs a bit of editing for grammar and punctuation. Mel

Thanks for the reviews/crits, everyone. =D I'll be revising this poem and posting up a new version - but more critiques are welcome =) Mel

Save Ferris, you're leaving us all confused..

melodicatastrophe-- "Catastrophe" is indeed an apt title for this rubbish. Your verse grates at every rhyme with all the grace of a seven-foot three year old. From what else i ...

Thanks for the reviews! I'll be sure to work on it, and maybe post the new revised edition.

After careful revising, here's the final product - Sometimes the stars sing songs- they sing of days hope still had wings And sometimes the sky keeps secrets- never speaks of ...

Looks like it's a great start, but as luver said, some of the parts sound forced. I hope to read more of this!

Haha, I had no idea. About the bluejays, I mean. I may need to do research for this poem to find a more suitable bird =D Thanks for the tip! ...

I believe he's writing about the wall/fence that cuts between Israel and Palestine. I found no mistakes in spelling or grammar. But the words were powerful. My god, it is ...

Thank you Claduette and Kitty15 ;D All of my poetry is lower-case. That's just the way I like it. Outside of poetry, I'm a self-proclaimed grammar/spelling freak (I can't stand ...