mellophone7

My first reaction: confusion! I couldn't get what you were talking about. Then I read to the end, and I sort of ended up getting it. Are you trying to ...

I'm agreeing with everybody else so far. It was short, and it felt really cut off. Was this an introduction or, like, the start to a chapter? It felt like ...

I really like your poem! It had rhythm and rhyme, two things I like in poetry. The only comment I would make is the fourth line, that starts with "of ...