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Re: Life [Chapter 3]
Hey, I'm so glad this finally got posted. I was waiting as patiently as I could... Now to the review, I thought it started a little odd. I know it's ...
Nov 18, 2010 -
Re: Are You In? *Edited*
I thought you did a good job at keeping it true to the time period. I know this if for school, but if you like writing stories from this time ...
Nov 4, 2010 -
Re: The Bourreau and the Waltz Dancer - Ch.2 - P. 1
Hey, thanks for the request... I'm reading for the first time while reviewing so... I'll tell you my opinion at the end. Chapter 2: The Waltz Dancer - Part 1 ...
Oct 29, 2010 -
Re: Sophies' spirit
Hey, Okay... This was interesting. You had a lot of typos though. Maybe read over your next post. It took me a while to do that. I did like the ...
Oct 27, 2010 -
Re: Miyuki's spring fling
Hi, This was very nice. Very good imagery. A good opener for a novel I thought. There were some things I thought I would point out. A soft touch on ...
Oct 25, 2010 -
Re: Nari Loves Yeon Sook CHAPTER I
Hey, I thought this was nice. There were just a few things... 12:57PM, TUESDAY. I'm deeply ensconced in my office chair with my feet spread-eagled There shouldn't be a d ...
Oct 25, 2010 -
Re: The Bourreau and the Waltz Dancer - Ch. 1 OLD
Hey Roal, I liked this. Normally the executioner is the bad guy but you have him as a protaganist. I enjoyed the internal conflict throughout the chapter. There were a ...
Oct 19, 2010 -
Re: Chapter One of An Unknown Name
Hey, I thought this was interesting with the drunk mother and all. I was wondering about the tense. You're writing in present tense and though it's fine and you stay ...
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: Knowing Lilly Devwa- chapter two
Hey, I got your PM and here I am. So... I liked the first chapter better but this was good. One thing I saw a lot is you like run ...
Oct 9, 2010 -
Re: Masterpiece
Okay, you can discount like two of the views because I had to come to this story three times for different interruptions. I wanted to point out before I started ...
Oct 9, 2010 -
Re: The Birth Of Lord SvaTantra
Interesting. A little off the wall, but it was cool. It was a dark wintry night, the Moon was full and it splayed it's silver rays all over the Earth. ...
Oct 9, 2010 -
Re: Knowing Lilly Devwa - chapter one
This was good. I didn't know what to expect by the title but that can be a good thing. My phone jumped to life before the sun had set up ...
Oct 9, 2010 -
Re: Hate or Love? *edited*
I liked this... but I am a fan of most romantic stories. This was really short. So short, in fact that I am wondering if there is a second part. ...
Oct 8, 2010 -
Re: Her Molten Core - Chapter 1 (16+)
Hey, I liked the story. I didn't find many things wrong but there were a few things here and there. I like the humor. Humor is one of the things ...
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: 01 - The Shadine
The sun was setting; casting long shadows over the baron landscape. Baron is a word, but it means a nobleman. The word you are looking for is barren. No biggie. ...
Oct 3, 2010