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I thought you could add something to that part. It seemed kind of short and quick. Which is fine but I want more of the story than you're giving me. ...

I know the title is pretty weak so if you have any suggestions that would be great. Of course, any grammar/creative suggestions are welcome as well. As a warning this ...

Pink, I'm sorry but I don't know how to post a link. I'm technically dysfunctional. I want you to review The Masquerader Chapter 2 in General Fiction Novels. Sorry again, ...

[Taryn Collins is nineteen years old. She lives in New York City, going to NYU and has an abusive boyfriend.] [Taryn is sitting alone in her bedroom, sitting on her ...

I really liked this. Normally it's the girl who is in love with someone who doesn't love them. I'm going to nitpick. Jesse stared at the papers that hid his ...

The Masquerader has attacked the Duritanian army again! Maliel is a country that has been swallowed by the growing Duritanian Empire. The Masquerader is a masked vigilante that fights for ...

I tried to follow people's advice but I may have just made it worse. Any criticism won't hurt my feelings.

Hey, I could be wrong but if people are dying of lack of oxygen they wouldn't die at different intervals. Maybe a few minutes apart but that's not what I ...

Thanks for the post. I'll keep that in mind. Honestly, I'm not very good at action scenes. I'm better at developing personalities.

I liked this but I don't know where you are. Is it Greece? I can't tell. Maybe that's just me being dumb. There are lots of spelling mistakes. If you ...

Hey, I felt like the relationships developed really quick. Suddenly she's friends with Noel. Suddenly she has a crush. It didn't seem very real to me. You don't talk to ...

Maliel has been taken over by the growing empire of Duritan. Now a masked vigilante is fighting back while a rebel group plans a course of action. Want to read ...

Okay... I feel like this could be something so make it so. He says that he's new and then repeats it. You might want to change that. It's kinda weird. ...

I could only find one mistake so I'm going to nitpick. [/quote]As I sat up, it took me some time to register that it was so late at night. Or ...

Thank you. I've actually never heard that before but I was trying something new. Now I know what not to do.