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This was really bad so I just got rid of it. Sorry. Try chapter three instead. Maybe it will be better. :D

Thanks for the reply. The teacher actually gave me three topics I had to follow in three different paragraphs and then told me what my conclusion had to be... So ...

The summary is great. I don't mean to ge repeating things. I'm sorry if I come off as annoying.

This was originally a story for my English teacher. I wanted to post it because I liked it. This was an assignment after we read the short story called "A ...

I thought this was great! It was cute and I want to find out what happens to the Rubber Duck. Most of this is just a few nitpicks. There I ...

Hey JamesB! Welcome again and thanks for the suggestion. This was great. Turning right down an alleyway, moss on the cobblestones and dirt making it slippery, he heard the men. ...

This is an essay for my English class. I need reviews ASAP. All of this is on short stories we've read. I'm sorry if you get lost. I've got a ...

I finally found your prolouge! I have been looking for it. Anyway. I liked this. I am one for a vague prolouge myself so the questions I am going to ...

Hi Okay... Answers to your questions first. I'm not sure. I think male since the waiter called him Mr. Quarts, but if he looks like a girl maybe his is ...

I liked it but I might have missed a prolouge or something because I was really confused about who was narrarating for a while. Maybe you could clear that up ...

Welcome to YWS, Deelish. I liked this. The problem is that there is a bit of a time conflict. You say it is 1975 but with the thin, work apron ...

Hey Sailor, First of all. I liked how real the story came out. I hope you haven't really lived this but you did a great job writing it as if ...

Hey LittlePetRock, This was cool. Some of the colors were hard to read though. The bird paragraph was fine by me. I liked it a lot. Dog - You promised ...

Hey Teddybear, I liked it and want to hear more. I only saw one thing that I could really complain about. “I want you to call my name and scream ...

Thanks for your post, guys. Just as a heads up, I plan to go into more description on the characters at a later chapter. I'll try to do that soon.