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Re: Life [Chapter 3]
Hey, I'm so glad this finally got posted. I was waiting as patiently as I could... Now to the review, I thought it started a little odd. I know it's ...
Nov 18, 2010 -
Re: Chaos and Order in Animal Farm and Lord of the Flies *Review
I'm sorry I posted this so late and am now trying to get someone to review it. I need to turn this in in two days. Please keep an eye ...
Nov 17, 2010 -
Re: Feed The Pink Elephant! [Open!]
Can you review this for me in General Fiction Novels? Thanks
Nov 9, 2010 -
Re: Are You In? *Edited*
I thought you did a good job at keeping it true to the time period. I know this if for school, but if you like writing stories from this time ...
Nov 4, 2010 -
Re: Masquerader Chap. 3
Maliel is a country that has been taken over by the growing Durtianian Empire. The Masquerader is a masked vigilante that attacks the Durtanian army. A rebel group plans action ...
Nov 4, 2010 -
Re: The Bourreau and the Waltz Dancer - Ch.2 - P. 1
Hey, thanks for the request... I'm reading for the first time while reviewing so... I'll tell you my opinion at the end. Chapter 2: The Waltz Dancer - Part 1 ...
Oct 29, 2010 -
Re: Sophies' spirit
Hey, Okay... This was interesting. You had a lot of typos though. Maybe read over your next post. It took me a while to do that. I did like the ...
Oct 27, 2010 -
Re: Miyuki's spring fling
Hi, This was very nice. Very good imagery. A good opener for a novel I thought. There were some things I thought I would point out. A soft touch on ...
Oct 25, 2010 -
Re: Nari Loves Yeon Sook CHAPTER I
Hey, I thought this was nice. There were just a few things... 12:57PM, TUESDAY. I'm deeply ensconced in my office chair with my feet spread-eagled There shouldn't be a d ...
Oct 25, 2010 -
Re: The Bourreau and the Waltz Dancer - Ch. 1 OLD
Hey Roal, I liked this. Normally the executioner is the bad guy but you have him as a protaganist. I enjoyed the internal conflict throughout the chapter. There were a ...
Oct 19, 2010 -
Re: Chapter One of An Unknown Name
Hey, I thought this was interesting with the drunk mother and all. I was wondering about the tense. You're writing in present tense and though it's fine and you stay ...
Oct 14, 2010 -
Re: Feed The Pink Elephant! [Open!]
Hey Pink The Masquerader in General Fiction Novels, please.
Oct 13, 2010 -
Re: The White Bible Chapter 1
For anyone who has been following my novels, The Masquerader is still my main project. Want to read Chapter Two ? It is said that in our world there is ...
Oct 12, 2010 -
Re: Hate or Love? *edited*
Hey, I wanted to tell you your edited version is much better. I thought you would like some more feedback on your new version. I don't have much more to ...
Oct 9, 2010 -
Re: Knowing Lilly Devwa- chapter two
Hey, I got your PM and here I am. So... I liked the first chapter better but this was good. One thing I saw a lot is you like run ...
Oct 9, 2010