meggy86

I like it! You put a lot of emotion into it and even if the grammar isn't perfect its still pretty good.

The sand tickles my bare feet, and I giggle splendidly. The sun is scorching my head, and it’s so hot that I have to put my hands protectively to my ...

I really like how you managed to create two realistic characters in only a few sentences. I really like it, and it would be cool if you kept going with ...

I'm not sure if "turbulence" is a good name for this or not; any ideas are welcome. Also, I have no idea if this is good or not; I've never ...

This is really good. I can never write short stories because I need lots of time to develop a plot and good characters but you just jump right in to ...

A Bridge of Colors I like the title. It really fits. A bridge of colors hangs, motionless in the sky. You could try seperating this into two lines if you ...

The cooling wind swings (huh?) briefly in the humid, July air. As a spotless[s], [/s]digital camera clicks away, the girl posing grows more and more anxious. Her soft, chocolate brown ...

You have a few grammar or technical errors, most of which are mentioned above, but overall I think it will be a great story if you just keep with it. ...

[quote]I lift my gaze towards the morning sky, Whose broken pieces glow the palest blue - The [b]canopoy[/b] of trees hides what is true - And so remains untouched by ...

Outside in the cold blowing wind, Nice intro! I already have an image of standing outside on a cold winter day with ice pelting my face, which I futilely try ...

Have you ever sat in bed at night restless and unable to sleep, staring out into the dark, your lips a thin line against your pale face, and shivered, haunted ...

“Yes. I was born in Ireland on July 9th, 1701. My father was a silversmith, as was his father. Our family had a little store, called the Simmons Family Silversmith. ...

I don't know why, but I've always loved thunderstorms. Maybe it's the steady pound of the rain on the roof. Maybe it's the feel of my heart having an adrenaline ...

I really like your story so far. In a matter of paragraphs, we are introduced to your character whom we instantly relate with and feel bad for,give us an action ...

[quote="peace-love-dream"]This is a very very very very rough draft of the very beginning of my book. It needs to be revised a lot so please don't hesitate to criticize [quote]I ...