meggy86

First of all, this would be a lot easier to read if you left a space between each paragraph. Right now it just appears as a huge jumble of words, ...

The story is interesting but the grammer is patchy. You should try using spellcheck because I saw a few spelling errors too. Also, the beginning is too abrupt and doesn't ...

I don't have time for a full length review but I just had to say that this is a really great piece. There's a ton of action and realistic emotion ...

Well, silversun, I just don't know how you do it. Once again you have a creative, constantly developing plot that enthralls readers and pulls them in. You have realistic, believable ...

PLEASE POST THE NEXT CHAPTER SOON!!!!!! Or just go ahead and post the whole book so I can find out what happens. The story has a few grammar errors and ...

Thanks guys! And yeah, the poem does seem sort of shallow from a certain viewpoint. I was writing it more to describe how you feel when you have a crush ...

Well, I'm glad you like it and thanks for posting a reply! I really appreciate it. -Meggy

Sorry, I don't have time for a review but I would like to guess. It it time? Hopefully you let us know someday. Anyways, I really like it. It has ...

So...the poem's pretty good but it has one huge flaw. It isn't a poem- it's a paragraph. And it's fine if you keep it the way it is because it's ...

Sorry if I seem kind of harsh in my review. I put a lot of my own thoughts and opinions into my critiques and you should feel free to ignore ...

Okay, this revision is pretty much the same as the last one but I did make a few changes. Let me know what you think. Even just a line saying ...

Chapter 7: So he was willing to abandon his home and possessions to elope with her but just left her on board a ship being raided by pirates with no ...

Chapter 1: I read this before the revision and I really like the changes you’ve made. I think the relationship between Murtagh and Madeleine is much more realistic, building up ...

Once again, the plot is sort of sketchy. M Main concern with this section is when Beth accuses Ethan of robbery. What evidence did she have? And even if she ...

Pretty good story so far. The main thing I would work on is the dialogue. It's really choppy and doesn't sound like anything somebody would actually say. Also, capitalization and ...