meganTQ

I agree with TheGillianGill's comments, and I like the idea and the point you're making with this. I think a diary format would make this text a bit more interesting ...

I love this poem and the message, but there's a bit of room for improvement: His features undefined, ~I think the rhythm would flow better if you took out 'so' ...

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I really loved this, especially the ending. It makes you completely change your previous opinion about him. I found it really interesting and would like to see a bit more ...

I really like the idea of this poem and the emotion, and your imagery is stunning. I do have a few suggestions, but of course it's totally up to you, ...

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I really like this, it's sweet and sad at the same time and I like how it gives the reader a message about revenge without being all preachy. There are ...

This poem is really interesting. I have a few minor issues though: It is approval, nonchalance, dismay, encouragement, dismissal, and enthusiasm. I like the ideas but these two lines throw ...

I actually really like the email format, it makes this a bit different to other stories! I really like this story it's funny and so true, reminds me of horrific ...

o.O intriguing! I really like this, and want to read more! A few nitpicky issues with syntax things, particularly this section: 'What can possibly be the reason someone kill this ...

I love this poem, and totally agree with the message! I like the way you've taken a serious point and conveyed it in a humorous way, and the rhythm and ...

I really liked this poem, it has a lovely flow to it and I liked the emotion and the story it seems to tell. However it does need a bit ...

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I loved this poem. Okay so maybe the rhythm isn't perfect, but the sentiment is beautiful and it's so emotive. I thought the stanza that was slightly more positive and ...

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