mariahneu

Hehehe.. and this is a closed forum, so for all our aspiring poets who don't want their work to be stolen, this may be what you're looking for. ;) Are ...

Thank you all; your comments are much appreciated. :) In reply to shadowstorm, I like the 1st rewrite more than the 2nd rewrite, because I got it critiqued on another ...

I've been working on an online community for young writers, which is sort of like The Young Writers Society, except it's an entire website with a Forum included. It's called ...

Yet another rewrite of the poem... Clandestine aromas escape from the bottle, The scents of the world depart with one spray. Evidence of passion consumes the air, Exotic scents are ...

Here's a re-write: Clandestine aromas escape from the bottle, The world's aromas evade with one spray. Evidence of passion consume the air, Exotic scents, whisked away by the breeze. Its ...

I would be glad to critique/comment anyone's poetry if they critique/comment on mine... :)

Mystery and romance escape from the bottle, The world's aromas fill the air, Evidence of love and lust consume the air, Exotic scents purify the air. Its owner, intoxicated by ...

Just a note: Crysi, I may submit this, so look at your own peril (she's an editor of the school lit mag, see). She was a dancing girl. One of ...

This poem was pretty good, but I'd fix the structure of it all by adding some stanzas and punctuation, .etc.