mandeyy

I like this poem . (: You're rhythm was nice except... Like a song on a summer breeze, words can and will touch. The last line seemed too short to ...

Overall , I didn't love this poem . I sort of felt disconnected and sad in a way when you listen to a child talk about their broken crayon . ...

I do very much like this poem ! :) It seems rhymers don't always go so well but I enjoyed this one . I agree that the last stanza is ...

Oh thank you so much ! That was possibly the nicest way anyone has ever critiqued my writing ! Okay I took some of your advice and rewrote the scene... ...

Well, I am currently writing a romantic-tragedy with a bit of supernatural in it. I'm working on killing off the beloved boyfriend. He is shot in a drive-by type thing. ...