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Thank you so much! This is really helpful, I find that I often lack description so thanks for showing me where. I'll take everything into account when I edit!

Thank you so much! I know I definitely have issues with portraying emotion, thanks for pointing it out! I'm really glad you enjoyed it :) This helps so much, thanks ...

Thank you so much for this review! It really helps, I'll be sure to take everything into account :) The part about the guards is really helpful, I really want ...

Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it, I'll take your critique into account when I edit :)

Hey! I’m back again :) I really really like this chapter, and I really felt connected to the characters! I’m really attached to Tristan, if I had to pick a ...

i really really love this, i don't know how to critique this or anything so i just want to say i really loved this, it's beautiful

ooh i love it so so much!! it's excellent!

ah sorry, i only just realised that something has gone wrong when i put his up here and there should be scene breaks when Jordan brings out the soup, and ...

Thank you! I understand what you mean about the overload of information, I'll try to space it out a bit more. Thanks again :)

ah thanks for this! this has helped a lot, i totally understand what you're saying with all this :) this chapter was really rushed so now i understand i need ...

thanks!!

thank you very much! your tips definitely help! as for that part where Xander assumes Rosie is dead, that was from a previous draft and i forgot to fix it... ...

thank you so much! i'm glad you especially liked those parts because they're the bits i'm most proud of! that sentence in the middle was supposed to be deleted or ...

oh, thanks for pointing that out! i meant to move or get rid of that sentence from the last version of this story but evidently i forgot... thanks for letting ...

thanks! i'll go back through it and fix any mistakes :)