magiclukehutch

I only read a little bit and the story was pulling me in. Start off with something a bit more exciting and not something boring.

Hello! How can a pen move radically? “Doors open!” Door's. Since it's a contraction for Door is. Give your dialogue a paragraph of its own, please. :) It makes it ...

I thought that was well written. But you did you write it?

Have you tried critiquing first? That way other people will read your work. Yeah, I did critique someone's work

Is anyone criting?

I can just say the same as the rest. Good work!