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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Little Terrorists

    Thanks alot for your critique. I can't access the edited piece of this story because my laptop is broken and this PC I'm using won't let me download the story.

    Tue Apr 03, 2007 10:50 am
  • Short Story » General, General Re: It won't kill anyone

    The girl was called Katy. Her friends were Bill and Charley This sounds like something a seven year old would write. I think you could write something better to improve ...

    Thu Mar 15, 2007 8:43 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Chicken Little

    I don't really understand this piece of writing.

    Thu Mar 15, 2007 8:36 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The War in the Attic

    That was a good piece of work. Royboy pointed out the mistake. But well done! Keep up the good work! :)

    Wed Mar 14, 2007 9:22 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Little Terrorists

    Chapter One Kevin Kuff, the Prime Minister of Great Britain, sat at his desk typing into his laptop. It was seven o’clock and Kevin was absolutely shattered. He picked up ...

    Wed Mar 14, 2007 8:49 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Little Terrorists

    Thanks a lot for your critique dark light. You don't become a man/woman until your 18 and that is a fact. And you don't usually find terrorists under 20, do ...

    Wed Mar 14, 2007 8:42 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Little Terrorists

    The boy's agency isn't called Little Terrorists. Thanks for the critique. I'm good at prologues., but not at books

    Tue Mar 13, 2007 9:46 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: SAS Story

    Thank you for looking at my work! If you ever need me to look at anything, just PM me.

    Sun Feb 18, 2007 6:58 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: SAS Story

    u posted, be patient. I've had pieces of work not recieve a crit until days after posting it. But as you asked so, ahem , nicely, here's a quick run-down ...

    Sat Feb 17, 2007 9:32 pm
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Silver Soldier of the Sea

    I didn't really understand this but the description was great. It was at a perfect length.

    Sat Feb 17, 2007 9:10 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: SAS Story

    Is anyone going to crit my work? I'm not going to continue my book until I get critique so CRIT!!!

    Sat Feb 17, 2007 9:07 pm
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Soldier

    I agree. You should say that you heard bullets flying past you and explosions detonating etc. Keep up the good work!

    Sat Feb 17, 2007 5:40 pm
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Soldier

    That was very short and I hope there is more to this poem. It seems like a great piece of work, but it's REALLY short.

    Sat Feb 17, 2007 5:25 pm
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: How To Write A Novel

    I think I know this guy. A user called Chairman posted the same post on my other critique board so I think I've recruited another member. Hurray!

    Sat Feb 10, 2007 9:37 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Cia and Myere - Chapter 1

    I really really liked that and I can't wait to read more!

    Sat Feb 10, 2007 6:32 pm


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