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Re: To Drown
i didn't see any grammatical mistakes, so good. (that's something i'm always critiqued for (i have terribnle grammer)) grammer isn't the most important thing in a poem, it capturing feeling ...
Nov 15, 2008 -
Re: alive but dying (revised)
i guess you're right, once you read it it's a pretty sucky poem. i don't have any real poetic talent, because i can only write what i'm feeling i guess ...
Nov 15, 2008 -
Re: scribbler of dreams
i actually enjoyed this book, even though i'm not usually the type of person that's into sappy love stories, but this one was pretty good. it's sort of like a ...
Nov 12, 2008 -
Re: alive but dying (revised)
My voice is truthful but my words are lying My spirit is resisting but my mind is complying My eyes are dry but my heart is crying My body is ...
Nov 12, 2008 -
Re: Opposite of Life (revised)
I know I’m not far but I know I’m not here I finish this with the start that's supposed to be two seperate lines! :oops: :oops:
Mar 13, 2008 -
Re: Opposite of Life (revised)
Opposite of life Time is finished but hasn’t begun, Shattered into pieces but still together in one. If I speak shall it be heard? If I’m wrong will it be ...
Mar 13, 2008 -
Re: opposite of life
i've edited the poem and am reposting it as Opposite of Life(revised). please reread it and leave feedback! com'on i'm begging!
Mar 13, 2008 -
Re: Alive but Dying
thank you everyone! i want you to know that i really appreciate all the feedback!
Feb 15, 2008 -
Re: You know you're a Harry Potter Nut When...
153. when ever he asks a question raise your hand hand and reply "i have nothing to say" very loudly! lol, these were freaking hilarious! but the truth of is ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: Alive but Dying
My voice is truthful but my words are lying My spirit is resisting but my mind is complying My eyes are dry but my heart is crying My body is ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: opposite of life
Opposite of life time is finished but hasn’t begun shattered into pieces but still together in one if I speak shall it be heard if I’m wrong will it be ...
Feb 11, 2008 -
Re: I Don't Want To
this is really well written and the flow and rhythm is flawless. but... what the poem is actually about is hard to understand, i'm not sure i know what point ...
Feb 7, 2008 -
Re: the war of the amniox chp. 1
1st dimension: earth Annika laid in bed, wide awake staring at the ceiling. Her sweat matted her hair to her drenched forehead. She was aware that she had screamed, but ...
Feb 7, 2008 -
Re: Escape [Prologue...I think]
uh...wow. it was definitely strange but i'll say unique. lol! the mother-daughter theme is very unusual like kitty15 said, but that's what makes a story good, it's different from all ...
Feb 6, 2008 -
Re: Black and White
these are really good and very artistic! i love filtered sunlight and rememberance. these photos has an edge of mysterious purpose to them that makes you want to stare at ...
Feb 6, 2008
