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Concrete walls surrounding. The flight of my self is unbounding. The man in the hat speaks before us all. We are falling in our chairs from a building so tall. ...

Okay, I understand the formatting of your poem. I would have to agree with Abigail about the "forced rhyming". There are places you should insert words as well as places ...

The formatting is fine now, I was easily able to read your poem. It seems like you began to flow and rhyme, then the style changes. I like your style. ...

I love your style! You are very deep and specific. The writing creates a dark image of life and allows the reader to become lost in the "sadist" mind of ...

Amazing. The poem is very tense and exciting. I liked the way you word your sentences. They are not necessarily complete. However, the wording is proper for the style of ...

I would have to agree with the latter statement. The two insertions would in fact increase the flow of the poem. Excellent imagery as well!

Flow of the poem is a bit confusing. I like the quotations and the story. However, it seems a bit choppy. Put the poem "together". Keep the wording and the ...

To be uncertain is to invite injury. To be too sure is to live inadequately. Questioning motives that have once been stated. The creation of confusion becomes elated. The indulgence ...