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  • General Articles Re: Our Troups

    I know many have family and friends in Iraq. I personally have two cousins, who are more like brothers to me, who are over there right now. What I don't ...

    Dec 23, 2009
  • General Articles Re: You Do Not Belong Here

    I applaud you for facing this. You said you've been having nightmares, I am sorry, but I can see and understand why. I love how you've displayed this as well. ...

    Dec 22, 2009
  • General Articles Re: Stepfather

    It is very deep, and I love your style. You can really draw a reader in, which is key to being a writer. However, I don't understand all of the ...

    Dec 22, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Underworld High

    Thanks for the reviews guys I appreciate it. I have, as you can see, cut it way shorter and added as well as deleted a few things. Well, the other ...

    Dec 22, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Underworld High

    Prologue We’re all in our cave at the moment, but it is a little crowded with our two newest members of our family, Oro and Cloud. Plus, it’s getting a ...

    Aug 11, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Prologue

    I loved the story it really grabs your interest. I do however have a few issues with it, well one in particular. You told how everything happened to Allysia and ...

    Aug 11, 2009
  • General Articles Re: The Truth

    This is non-fiction, but it isn't the usual esay, a tale, a column or some event that I read in the newspaper and want to discuss it here. No. This...This ...

    Aug 9, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: This Posted is Dead. Don't read

    I like the plot, but you really need to use a spell check and reread it. For there are some spelling errors, tense errors and you tend to repeat yourself. ...

    May 29, 2009
  • Science-Fiction Novels Re: Mechanical Ghosts, part 1

    The story line is good and I understand it which is a plus (i get confused a lot), but the sentences are too choppy for my liking and there can ...

    May 29, 2009
  • General Fiction Novels Re: It only gets worse - chapter 1 - adapted :)

    You still have a few spelling errors like 'draw' should be drawer or drawers I'm not sure which you meant. But other than that it was good and ver captivating. ...

    May 16, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Once Upon a Time

    I understand why he detests the phrase so, but because of his animosity towards it and the past makes me want to find out more. I want to read more., ...

    May 16, 2009
  • Randomosity Re: Tell us the last thing you said in your mind (thoughts)

    Why does hating someone enrage people?

    Mar 4, 2009
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: London - since the bomb fell

    Interesting, confusing in the beginning for me at least, but then again I get confused easilly. but anyway it was good, very actually. A few spelling errors, but i don't ...

    Mar 4, 2009
  • Science-Fiction Short Stories Re: Leaving Humanity

    I agree with everyone who reviewed this before me, it's very well written and I would love to read the final draft and any of your other pieces. It makes ...

    Mar 4, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: random part of a story - revised

    This story is suspensfull and breathtaking. You have a vivid imagination and can express it in written words so it hums with the same detail and rhythm. Amazing, good job.

    Mar 4, 2009


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