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Loved every moment of it!!! I KNEW that girl was Gwen! Thank you for writing such a good story. Write more! Best wishes, Lucky

Good continuation that leaves more questions to be answered. Love it. But remember that when you start a new paragraph you have to add speech marks even if the character ...

Really good and suspenseful!!! Can't wait to get into the next part! Cheers Lucky

I think that whether you write two books at once or not is dependent on your writing style. Try it and if it works for you, do it. Personally, I ...

“WHAT?” My mother whipped her head up from her newspaper. Pinning me to the spot with her beady eyes, her eyes started to pop out of her head like bubbles. ...

Dear Bubbles, Thanks so much for the feedback. Yours, Lucky

Extremely interesting and well written! I love it!

It moves a bit too quickly for my liking. Why is it that he suddenly loves her? Also, there are many grammar mistakes. Try to integrate good grammar into your ...

Hey, I'm Jess and i've just joined. :D I love writing and I frequently sit down with just a pen and paper. I'm looking forward to making some new friends. ...

The Phoenix* Feathers gone and beak dust dry Wailing piteously, about to die. Blackened body, defeated pose An air of sorrow with her goes. But still she does remember when ...