lrrussell330

Good job, easily read and you pull the reader's attention tight off the bat, however I got kind of confused during the final stanza. Other than that it was great

Yeah i was going to edit it after i posted

This world is on fire Slowly running out of life Where success is dire for me there is no light However hot, however cold my being with you is worth ...

One day I saw two doves, the male was expressing his love. But the female just flew away the male was left to sorrow another day. The next day and ...

The second that the clock struck noon everyone stopped and stared because every one of them knew the dragon had entered his lair. With a head of fire, a heart ...

Hate gives me strength Love takes it away So hate me more, love me less stab a knife in my chest I don't know my own deal all I know ...