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This is a very powerful poem here. I like it. I do have a few changes i would like you to consider however. Like... "You treat me like I’m worthless ...

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The soft notes drifted out from under the closed door. She played beautifully, fingers gently stroking the keys, foot massaging the peddle. They were moulded together, breathing together, singing toge

yeh after i read your comment i realised that and changed it i hope it is clearer now! (no the a was a mistake)

Woken with a scream From a powerful dream looks through the window but sees not a thing Is that the reason for moonlight? Alert and alone An eerie wind blown ...

ok i really like the first line Stainless steel bars assigned in black coloring – eyelashes. I thought that was a really good introduction to the piece and i thought ...

I thought it was a really good piece of work, but (and i don't know if you'd meant to do this) in the first stanza you have used the lines ...

I really liked this poem. It was well written and flowed well. i really admire the way you used different ways for saying screamed, i would like to point out ...

Thank you so much that was really helpful! I know the rhyming was a little forced but i didn't really know what to put next (which doesn't sound too good ...

i agree with the point Sassylady333 made about posting a section of your script on here, i don't know how many people would bother following a link etc. but from ...

Wow i really like that the rhyme is good and the words are well chosen. I also like how you've kept it simple, it's a very well written poem! keep ...

Once I found a four leafed clover lying on the ground, The moment I picked it up my whole life turned around, I held it close and wished I wished ...