lozzen

hi, well first i really liked this, i don't know what it is that i liked so mnuch, i think it has something to do with your style of writing ...

Hi, i haven't posted anything in a while so i thought i could post this. I wrote it a while back for some assignment in english. I kept adding to ...

hey bisquit! Ok so i realise this is the beginning of the book and overall i thought it was good. A bit jumbled and hard to understand in places but ...

I would just like to say that i thought it was a rule on YWS to say at least one thing that is good about a piece. This would stop ...

ok as usual tis good, v. good i have been following this story and am really looking forward to the next chapter. Right onto spelling and grammer, i'm not too ...

Hi charlie, tis i the loz miester. Anyway, the poem. Loved the imagery it actually brought up similar pictures that i got from the book theif, (now thats not a ...

I loved the black and white photo of the apple tree that was beautiful. You have lots of talent with your painting and photography good luck! lozzen xx

Fantastic. That really gave me goose bumps. Your imagery is great, i can really picture the pub. There are a few mistakes grammar wise but nothing major. I do have ...

hmmm i got quite a clear view of him bein a guy, but maybe you should mention his name then just to make it that extra bit clearer. Btw i ...

Also I think you should definitely talk more about her character. How old is she? What does she look like? What sort of a personality does she have? Details help ...

Now before i do anything i would like to say that this poem has great potential and i like the topic. I do however have some issues with it. The ...

don't worry it is a fantasy story i will get round to posting the rest hopefully (when it's written) lol!

please don't judge my writing on this piece, it is something i came up with in literally in like 2 minutes! I was really bored so yet again i say ...

Yet again great work. Yes it was simple but that's what made it great, like it was being told from a childs point of view (enhanced by the use of ...

Gosh. Wow. Well, what can i say? Amazing. This is really beautiful. It really touched me. Beautifully written. I really love it. Seriously. The way you have written from your ...