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Re: deleted
Nearly all the way caught up. Two more chapters to read/review. Nitpicks There are no nitpicks today. Ahhh! Spooky man! Run, he is a vampire! Who apparently smokes. I guess ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: deleted
Hey there! I forgot about following this. I guess I'll review this and be on my way. (Happy review day!) Nitpicks old chewed up gum You need a comma between ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Contemptable Wrest - (Ch. 6) Part 2: Warrant for Witchery
Hey there again! I'm here to review the second part. Nice witch story. Nitpicks with haste, in hand, a mysterious book marked This sounds a bit klunky. It is worded ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Contemptable Wrest - (Ch. 6) Part 1: Warrant for Witchery
Hey there! Starting halfway through your story sadly, so I'm here to review! Happy review day! Nitpicks Without either half the team was a split egg, a sitting duck. It ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: According To...Chapter 2: MaS Attack (Simmer)
Hey there! Happy review day! Let's review. Nitpicks as stood facing the cage. as I stood facing the cage. could devour me I ran out of its attack path. could ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: If There Was No Tomorrow (Chapter 2: Jamie)
Hey there! Welcome to YWS. Also happy review day! I'm here to review. Nitpicks In the window I see Since In the window is an independent clause, you need a ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Home Sweet Texas [Chapter 1: Part 1]
Hey! I'm here to review this terrifyingly long chapter! Happy review day! Nitpick too week That's the only nitpick I saw. You can't be a week, silly goose! You can ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Can't wait to get back to uni! NOT.
Hey there! Welcome to YWS! Like Iggy pointed out, there is a blog section where it would be wiser to put this. Have a happy review day! Nitpicks I have ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Choir of Angels
Happy review day! Let's eat cake! Let's wait until after the review, of course. Nitpicks 16 year You don't use the actual numbers in writing unless it's the time. So ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Days of Future Pryde: Chapter Four
You'd think by know I had wondered how Kitty has gotten her powers. Of course, the question has never crossed my mind. Maybe once or twice, but still. That's pretty ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Chapter One: horns, scales, eyes and tails
Hi there! Interesting concept. Let's review! Nitpicks it was always “worse everyday has been Every time you start a new sentence, you always capitalize it. I found some more, but ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: The Tales of the Argonauts: The Osorezu and the Hana (Chapter 5-1)
When is 5-2 coming out? I've been waiting since this thingy came out. (Yes, I said thingy.) Happy review day, I hope you have taken time out of your schedule ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: The Musical Confrontation and the Decision [3] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
It's the last part! Maria and Ben will be separated soon! Noooooooo. Wait, we have no time for these nos. Let's get on with the review. Nitpick I’m Kelly’s sister, ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: The Musical Confrontation and the Decision [2] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Usually a review is here already. Oh well. I'll just review for the missing person! Nitpicks Mrs. Claus, Kelly and the elves with sharpened teeth shook their heads You need ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: The Musical Confrontation and the Decision [1] [Twelve Days Before Christmas 11] *Edited*
3 parts?! Yes, you did not know I was secretly following this story. I withheld my reviews- until now! Nitpicks She had decided to give up hoping Ben was following ...
Apr 27, 2014