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Re: Chapter 3: Three Weeks Left
Ok, I went to read your other chapters because I definitely do not like having to cut into the middle and read from there. So let's review, shall we? Ok, ...
Mar 8, 2014 -
Re: Three Blind Mice. (A Parody.)
Yep, it's a nice little time. Oh, hi! I'm your reviewer of this day. This has a nice tune. I wonder how they died. Drinking the chocolate shake? Got squished ...
Mar 5, 2014 -
Re: Everett--My favorite person
Ok, so I read the title and thought that you meant that you were lost in the woods and he found you and you played and then he led you ...
Mar 5, 2014 -
Re: The Alligator and the Mouse
A true story about friendship. I bet I know why he didn't eat the mouse. It was too small a meal for him. After all, why eat the pebble when ...
Mar 5, 2014 -
Re: His Legacy - Prologue
Hi! Welcome to YES! I will be your reviewer today *bows down and takes off hat* Let's start! Ok, the only nitpick I saw is the first formatting. It probably ...
Mar 5, 2014 -
Re: So I was bitten by a spider...
Welcome to the site! Let's review this. Now, this is quite humorous. You should mark it as humor. Ok, the only nitpick I saw was where you were missing a ...
Mar 4, 2014 -
Re: Convictions of a dead man
Ok, let's review this pop stand. I may or may not be copying so of the other person's nitpicking so don't judge me here. Ok, here are the nitpicks- He ...
Mar 4, 2014 -
Re: A Joy or a Pest, Who's Your Roommate?
I'm laughing at this even though it is very serious. Let's review! Let's first start off with the nitpicks. Then we'll progress to the actual review. Ok, let's see what ...
Mar 4, 2014 -
Re: One night in London....
I am here to review this chilling story. Ok,I agree with adj. This could make a murder mystery novella very easily. You could have the police investigating the murder and ...
Mar 4, 2014 -
Re: How do you say Goodbye?
Hi Shannon, time to review! This piece is really sad. A father, going to die from spirits that took him away from reality, finally escaping at last. A daughter expecting ...
Mar 4, 2014 -
Re: Of Mice and Marionettes: Case 2 - Sloth
Ok, here to review the next chapter of this. I like the formatting of this. It does make me wonder who makes it for him. They said that if I ...
Mar 4, 2014 -
Re: Of Mice and Marionettes: Case 1 - Wrath
Ok, here to review. So this sounds like the title Of Mice and Men. I never read the book so I can't really compare and contrast them together. This was ...
Mar 4, 2014 -
Re: House of the rising sun chapter 5
Ok, hi story! I had to go back and read the other chapters. Let's review this thing! Nitpicks Ok, first stop. Nitpicks. " did Did you hear that?" I asked ...
Mar 4, 2014 -
Re: 'Pop' goes the pill bottle.
Review time! Let's see what we can do! Round and round the depressed girl's mind , thoughts of suicide wander. The girl thought life was pointless. 'Pop!' goes the pill ...
Mar 4, 2014 -
Re: The Tales of the Argonauts: The Osorezu and the Hana (Chapter 3-1)
Ok, reviewing on my kindle. Let's see how this goes. Nitpicks So, let's cover the nitpicks shall we? She had narrow hips, but when she turned slightly, it could be ...
Mar 3, 2014