llobalito8

I hate to be repetitive but the use of the nursery rhymes in this poem was really great. Also, i feel the subject is something most people can relate too. ...

Really thanks to both of you. Again I love writing, but I am fairly new to this, and i really do want all the criticism i can get. I just ...

I think this is great. If it is an introduction to a short story then i really can't wait for the finished product. Of course you can take this where ...

After I posted I noticed one mistake, which is: flying in water's like smiling in frown. It should be, " flying in water is like smiling in frown." Sorry about ...

Glasses of wine and and cups filled with sin, mornings of thought following nights filled with gin intentions they fall and actions they stay till time blows on and they ...

I do agree with everyone else that the second stanza needs a little work, but overall i found the poem to be great. My favorite stanza was definitely the first ...

I thought it was great because of the ending. It was a complete surprise. I was expecting something a little more philosophical, but instead you gave us the picture of ...