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Interesting poem. Some things could be fixed, but they're pretty small. But Times plans weren't done. Shouldn't it be, "Time's" or something. And I like how you capitalized the "T" ...

Great story so far. Keep it up! There are some suggestions, though. By my guess, they were standing relatively close to my head. The "By my guess," part seemed awkward. ...

Chapter One Part One Evening, Sunday, May 24th Dear Diary, Today’s Jack’s birthday. And mine too, obviously. I mean, we are twins, after all. Only Mr. Higglebun didn’t do anything. ...

Thanks for the help! The suggestions will be very helpful. And the story is written in present tense, or first person past tense. I just posted that, so check it ...

A little weird, but makes the reader want to read the next one. big headed Shouldn't there be a dash instead of a space(big-headed)? "What's a sparkle?" Where did he ...

Here's part of a story I'd like some help with. Any better titles would be great too. Prologue “Easy now. Easy.” That’s Jeremy, Maria’s husband. He’s about to become a ...

This was a really creepy story! I liked it. Some things could be better, though. Try describing the man just a little bit more, and his relationship with Madeline. Don't ...

I don't think of nuclear power and all of that particularly interesting, but you made it almost sound exciting. There were some things I didn't like, of course, too. Most ...

Hey everybody. I'm obviosly new to this site, so I don't know how it works. I like writing fiction, and am writing a novel right now. I'm still in school, ...