little.angelfire

Well this is part of Chapter one. I just started it about 15 minutes before I posted this. I'm just really bored in the library right now so I started ...

haha, yeah, I ran out of words to say I guess XD I suppose I do tend to repeat myself, but I never notice it, so thanks for pointing it ...

hehe, Alexial is really old, but she's immortal and doesn't age XD It would be further explained if I added more onto this, but I haven't decided whether I want ...

I'm not really sure if I'm going to make this an actual book or anything. If I did, then this would be the prologue. I was just really bored in ...

*gasp!!* My Muffin can draw!!! Drawing well she does, too!!!! --meow

Oh my god!!!! Evanescence!!!! Who couldn't love them????? Amy Lee!!!!!! *drools* great, you're making me salivate >.< I loooooooooooooove Evanescence with the sexy Amy!!!!!!!!!! w00t!!!! oh yeah, and

Okay...I forgot I even did this post XD but I'm gonna reply anyways XD I just wanted to say it's not a vampire book. The Countess just thinks that bathing ...

I actually dissagree. I think the dialogue is good for just this. It's leaving the reader hanging and wondering what's really going on. It's only not working as well here ...

I was wondering if anyone would notice the hooka in the background XD XD (it's never been used and is only for decoration...just so you people know) These are all ...

Skipping over the grammar and spelling... I really don't think there's much to say on this bit (it's just really short and I don't know what to say). I think ...

wow...I didn't know I'd be on any lists, but i"m on, like, five of them XD don't I feel loved I"m just gonna put down the names I call people ...

I think it actually fits well and should use this in story. I wasn't really sure how you were going to do this, which is why I asked you to ...

Alright, I pretty much only skimmed through this (since I'm still supposed to be doing homework), and I'll leave the spelling and grammar mistakes for someone else again. I really ...

hehe, I told you someone else would name the grammar and spelling issues ^.^ --meow

I'll leave the specific grammar correcting up to someone else. I don't enjoy doing that. I'll just point out that you have some spelling and grammar mistakes that, if you ...