lilymoore

Hey there Tala. I think Ky is right. You have a lot of work to do on this. One thing that you should be careful of is that you have ...

Hello Barrett, Lily here! And might I say, I love the title here. It’s very interesting. But I do have a few nitpicks to point out! Lazy Sunday, the day ...

Hi Autumn, Lily again, here to review you into next week! :D As the sun begins to set, the anxiousness begins to creep out ‘anxiousness’ is a very long word ...

23 reviews and now I'm headed off to the demolition derby. If it gets done soon enough, I'll still be able to make it back in time to him my ...

I’m baaaack! Hehehe she sucked on her cigarette viciously. “Sucked” feels like the wrong word. “puffed” maybe? Griff is right about the italicized part. I think it would do better ...

Snoink is totally on spot with this, Kit. You’ve set us up to give us an intelligent ranting poem (ranting in the best meaning of the word) but you don’t ...

Hey Jasmine! I think Shephard made a good point about this. It does seem to fade off from the beginning. This sounds so upset at the beginning and it sounds ...

Hi there Autumn! I wanted to point out a few minor things. used to hate the rain Now I've made friends with it I'm kinda kinda is improper. It should ...

Jon, old buddy old pal! *glomps* I’m here to review the heck of this…okay, not really. But I did want to point out a few little things. :D the south ...

Hello Wario! I don’t think we’ve ever met but I’m Lily. He sat across from me, looking at me like I was a filthy animal in a cage. Four little ...

Hey Rosey. I figured, to say thank you for your help yesterday, I would at least give you a review. It was the least I could do for you. As ...

Hey Pengu! I figured, for your help yesterday, I could do something for you. But I’m not good at much other than reviewing. So I give you a review! i ...

Hey there, Auteur. How goes it!? I like this poem. The tone is dark and kind of twisted without being over the top though it is a bit short. I ...

Snoink is right, this does sort of feel like a rap but it isn’t a bad thing, not at all. :D I just had too little nitpicks. You could at ...

Ooohers, hello StoryWeaver! Like a worm inside an apple Left to form a gaping hole For another unaware that they must bear The poison you ensue. I love these lines ...