lilymoore

Hey there Conrad! Plenty of people already did the nitpicking but I figured I could still give an overview. Here goes. Word Choice Here is one of the major concerns ...

If you have to choose, I would probably pick the second image of the John Hancock Center. The way you photographed it, the image is stiking and long, which is ...

This isn't bad but there are a few things that could do with some fixing. First off, well, it looks a bit scratchy. Try and fine tune it so that ...

Hey everyone, I have more photo manipulations for you to look at. Okay, due to copy right and all that, I can only post links to my pictures, which can ...

Aushy, I finished reading chapter 5, but I forgot to review…oops! *huggles for being so late* Plot Okay, you know I have to mention…OMG, looong. But that’s not so much ...

Okay, Antigone, I’m going to agree with you about how you how it is in fact a bit corny. But…I will say this…it can become better. I’m not going to ...

Banned for being a boy....boys have cooties...eeewwwww! *runs away, arms flailing*

Hey, I begged for something to review and I got it. *whispers to self* Yessss! Her hair was wavy, long and silvery blonde, and her eyes, wide and almond shaped, ...

Okay, Abby, I’m not sure exactly why, but YWS or you really formatted your story funny. Now I’m going to be honest, this needs a lot of work as far ...

Hey there, eddykins. Dialogue Okay, Evi made a very good point in her above review. Dialogue is one of the best ways to reveal aspects of your character that you ...

8.5/10. Rather funny the way I see it. And the whole fact that it looks like a flare off of facebook is sorta cool.

7/10 for the peace and love hippie mumbo jumbo. 5/10 for shameless self-premotion.

Done, Done, Done, Done and Done. *puts checkmarks on her notebook* Okay, those all were finished in a day. Give me more....pwease!

Whoo, 4475 words. My advice next time you have a chapter this long, break it up into pieces. Just post the title as The Love Note, chap. 3 part 1 ...

Hey there, lily here as requested. Sorry I’m a little late, I forgot to check my Will Review Thread. Well, Rosey seems to have done a major review so I ...