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Hi yubbies21, I think that this original idea was fantastic and a unique way of telling the story of a murder. The way that you wrote that the lamp-post had ...

Hi TheSoundOfRain, The way that you have written this with the use of the colloquial language creates a picture of a everyday ordinary guy, which I believe was your intention ...

Hi sbitonti, I enjoyed your first paragraph a lot. Sometimes I feel the same when I'm writing. I am intrigued as to where you take this story. I hope that ...

Hi, I personally enjoyed your story a lot. I was drawn into it from the very beginning. The way that you wrote it was one of the reasons I enjoyed ...

Hi LJM368 Even though this story was pretty short I actually enjoyed the eeriness surrounding it. As others have said, I believe that if this story was a little longer ...

I loved it!! It was so mysterious yet beautifully tragic. I think that you need to have more confidence in yourself as a writer because if you don't, you're not ...