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  • Poetry » Lyrical, Other Re: [Look At] Me

    Thank you very much, that means a lot.

    May 4, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Other Re: [Look At] Me

    Thanks for your review, the ellipses on the lines "Sticks... stones/Sticks... and Stones?'" reads more as a fast comma now, and it flows much better. Thank you for bringing that ...

    May 3, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Other Re: [Look At] Me

    I fixed it, I actually had to delete the bold face from each line in the source code, annoying, but done.

    May 1, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Other Re: [Look At] Me

    Thanks for your input, I apologize for the bold face, for some reason it wouldn't let me disable it. On the topic of poetic inversion, my poem is read more ...

    May 1, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Other Re: [Look At] Me

    Thanks for you input. I decided to upload the clean version in light of it. Thanks. Lilcanich

    May 1, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Flight of Icarus

    Thanks for your input, the "Sun" vs "sun" was actually a typo when I uploaded it, and didn't really notice it. As I said in my response to Rosey, this ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Flight of Icarus

    Thank you very much for your critique, you are correct in your analysis. I did do the word play consciously, keep in mind, this was a freeverse, completely made up ...

    Apr 28, 2013


No, it's not that you didn't succeed. You accomplished a lot, but, if you want to touch people, don't concentrate so much on rhyme and metre. Think more about what you want to say instead of how you're saying it.
— LCDR Geordi La Forge