lightflight101

Tilting my head upward, I look at the two glistening shapes hovering above me. I’ve lingered so long to see them that know I wonder if it really was worth ...

I LOVED it you did such a great job. The sentece i think you should fix is "Also, her face, free from cake-like make-up some girls pack into their pores." ...

I really liked it. You left me hanging and i'm dieing to know what comes next. When the man with the clip board is about to go back to hell ...

It made me really sad but in a good way. I loved it. You did a great job of capturing the true feelings that comes with that kind of pain. ...

Friendship so close by time spent together How can I dream of the man that she loves I know that we shall be friends forever I refuse to come between ...

I could feel the magic and excitment vibrating off of your main charector. I really liked it you did a great job creating the setting and having the charectors drift ...

I liked it alot. It did a really good job of keeping my attention and made me think about what may happen nexted. There are a few spelling mistakes like ...