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Re: A parody
Planes fall from the sky, soundlessly Right infront of my eyes, Coke cans under rubber boots, with No debris, nor spark. I go to scream and no words leave, I ...
Jan 22, 2012 -
Re: Bigger than man
The bigger the heart the harder they fall, And down the boy fell. Through The cracks he dissipated, Through the boards he dropped. Past the rats and the drains and ...
Mar 5, 2011 -
Re: Thumbtack
My lizard has been speared with a thumbtack. I don’t know why my little sister did that, Maybe she was feeling a little out of whack. All I know is ...
Mar 4, 2011 -
Re: feelings
When i first came onto the page (after following the section of poetry) I was from the start dreading the read- Having from a first glimpse seen a layout far ...
Mar 4, 2011 -
Re: He Had the Ocean
The imagery is used well. The pentameter keeps a good pace, with the rhyme scheme complimenting this- the poem reads well and has a very nice story like quality to ...
Mar 4, 2011 -
Re: Paint
It's a nice simple poem: the idea is deep, clever and does ask an interesting question- i know i can relate to how you feel. Indeed in: "It all fades,sooner ...
Mar 4, 2011 -
Re: peace at last
The poem needs punctuation to dictate some kind of tempo: At the moment it is just a mesh of words in a column. However you do have a strong opening, ...
Mar 4, 2011 -
Re: caffeine nights
while others sleep caffeine takes hold, the cars with their lights and their noise pass by as if real, or close, a thrill as i feel a force other than ...
Mar 3, 2011
