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[pre] Feelings surge... My pen bleeds... [/pre] I would suggest taking out the ... after these. It makes the poem feel passive. And still Take this out, or at least ...

I'm in the same boat, senor. My screenname was stardragon (I doubt anyone remembers me. I was young, and not a very good writer) I haven't written anything since I ...

Confusion in every thought A life put on the line One heart, recently broken. One heart, recently found. A new connection, waiting to happen? Or an old one, waiting to ...

I was a member of TYWC back when I was 10 or 11. If I do remember correctly, my first entry was a short story about a boy on a ...

As an actress, I can completly relate to this poem, especially that last line: "End the show, let it die." Those are my feelings at the end of every school ...

and gave the earth a gossamer gown. I completely disagree with Writersdomain, I think the word gossamer just doesn't work here. It has to be one of the most overused ...

It makes up for the rhyming that wasn't there. It actually started out as a non-rhyming poem, but I didn't like it that way. Oh well :)

I think it needs to be a bit longer, or you at least need to change it a bit. Right now it's sort of jumbled and it's not going anywhere. ...

I really like the rhythm of the poem here. But I just can't help but feel like somebody is reading this at a highschool graduation somewhere. :wink: Otherwise, it's OK. ...

his days are numbered in the crash-course direction tracked down and censored through the beaten screen he's found no solace in displays of affection his quality learnings are bound to ...