leebass

Hi, i really like it. I really get a vivid impression of the characters, especially the father. You can tell he's the kind of person that makes the most of ...

Hi. At one point you write 'highter' instead of 'higher' which is a small mistake. I thought overall it was good and you portayed the girl's apprehension well. The only ...

It looks like your trying to go a bit 'House of Leaves' with the blue words and the different font sizes. This sort of thing can work really well in ...

I liked it. You really get the sense of the emotions you were feeling at the time. I could vividly see you standing at the pier and there's a feeling ...

I really enjoyed it :). I like how the tension builds after Mark fights the first kid and you handle the action really well. It's not overly described. There's a ...

Hi, did you post this in the right place? Are you asking for this to be critiqued? To answer your question, personally i enjoy listening to music while typing and ...

Hi, I found the notes very informative and interesting, the only thing was that i think you used commas quite a lot and sometimes unnecessarily. I'll put it in pink. ...