laurendoak

Well, first off, I'd like to say that the story plot is quite interesting. But, you definitely need to edit and fix up your grammar and punctuation. For instance, all ...

This was really interesting, it caught my attention immediatly. I am curious to see what happens in the future. Will there be any sequels?

what's your style?

This actually should've been placed in fanfiction, seeing as how I actually based it on Twilight, but it came from me, and the names just... flowed. Please don't comment on ...

It is quite short because, I'm just throwing around some ideas, trying to get a taste of what readers like. Tell me what this makes you think of, also; exp. ...

I see what you guys mean! I think that I will change it around a lot. And I mean a whole lot! Thank you for the critiques!

Please do not be afraid to critique harshly, since this one has been edited. But I just can't seem to find that copy anywhere. :?: :shock: :?

prologue "Beep, beep! Wake up, Sitka! It is dark and cloudy, again--," My alarm was shut off just then. I sat up to stretch all the kinks of a deep ...

Beware!!! Major spoilers here! I just finished reading the entire Twilight series. I had read Twilight last school year for language arts class. A couple of weeks ago, my friend ...

I just finished a series by Stephenie Meyer. I read the first book, Twilight, as a class in language arts last year. A few weeks ago, my friend sent me ...

This story is really well written. It's something a lot of people can relate to! But,your character has no, well... character.

This story seems a tad bit confusing. It just jumps into this weird place, and the character is doing weird things. I don't really get her much. I don't see ...

My name is Lauren! I write mainly fantasy fiction. and fan fiction!! I am a major harry potter/twilight fan. My favorite author would have to be stephenie meyer. I am ...