laughingfreakx3

You should show and not tell more in the poem You told everything and there was no showing in it that would give it more spark I read it and ...

I also agree with Suz. I really does not sound like a poem Maybe you should read more poetry but the message is great and I liked it but theres ...

I tried to fix up the poem so tell my what you think I lOVE suggestions on how to make them better thanks a lot

wake up open your eyes it's so crazy how you could think of a person one way and then they turn out to be the exact opposite the way they ...

A simple song repeats in my head over, again, once more the right words sound as if they were wrong but sound so sweet. Just that simple tune fills the ...

I walk through... rain shine fog snow I feel... sadness depression encouragement laughter I taste... silvia dirt mango effort I smell... nothing I AM FEELINGLESS... SO BOYS IF YOU BREAK ...

Wild flowers are like love it flows they both rise within you There's many different colors of both they dies and grows love go through cycles Wild flowers need love ...

Sitting in my bed carrying sorrows, sadness, depression, and loneliness. Crying, being mad at the world, and getting tied. Now I think I am brainwashed from my crazy depression.

Your poem was really good for your first try.l Your rhyming was great too. But you should try to show and not tell next time, although you did show and ...

I wake up on Friday I ask myself Did the letter come in the mail? I wake up on Saturday I ask myself Did the fax go to my printer? ...

Cold... Warn... Chilly... Hot... Explains the seasons well enough, rigth? Or does it?

Our friendship was strong Our friend ship was amazing But ya know what..... Our friendship...was you and me I knew our friendship was amazing I knew our friendship was strong ...

Tears are falling down my checks Sadness is flowing through my body Memories are running through my mind The way I feel about you... I can' explain

sitting i a dark corner... scared crying my eyes out... scared a chill running throuth my body... scared foot steps in the dark... scared a ring on my doorbell... not ...

Maybe if you keep pulling the strings you might find something or maybe not. If you keep pulling the strings a miracle could happen or maybe not. But if you ...