larztheloser

Hi You, We read your tale with great interest. In particular we liked the sense of metanarrative and clever use of adjectives. Howsoever, dearest mountain, I feel the need to ...

Hey, You seem to want something very specific, so here goes... Should I scrap it? Personally I never scrap writing, I just go away for a while and then come ...

Hey, The one thing that is clear is that you understand the play. All the basic structural elements are there for an amazing essay. Your spelling and grammar is good ...

Hey Keith, First thing I'm going to say is that this is clearly a very well-thought through essay that you have put quite a bit of time in to. The ...

That's a REALLY good piece! I love your opening, I love the sheer power and passion behind your work, and I love your characterization (certainly reminds me of To Kill ...

Not bad ... some criticism: 1) Be careful with their and they're 2) Don't make up a whole bunch of plans starting with the word "Top" and then pretend BP ...

PARAGRAPHING!!!! Apart from that you build a compelling narrative, for whatever reason I'm imagining Julia daughter of Augustus. I would have liked additional incentive to read your piece, a simile ...

Wow. This is excellent! You have good mastery of repetition, sentence construction. I also like the sort of introspective interior monologue you've got going on. And unlike Navita, I love ...

As well as the cussing thing, I would add for any kind of story, readers will be asking one question only: why am I reading this? So you're developing a ...

Hey screamandshout, So I gather you're trying to write a very emotional piece. The one major criticism I can offer is that given this, many of the ideas come across ...