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Hey great story and seems like the other viewers enjoyed it as well. I was a bit confused at the end about whether it was a ghost or not but ...

This is a beautiful story and i loved it. I find it great that you found inspiration from a little butterfly and it shows that you can find inspiration everywhere. ...

Hey just to let you know i absolutely loved your story! 1. I think that the plot is strong but just needs a little bit more added to it. 2. ...

Hi i think your story is along the right track but in some parts you keep saying then and i think you need to tie it down and edit it ...

Thank you for all your feedback but if someone has already pointed something out can you not as it gets very confusing I am only new at this and havent ...

Thank you for giving your feedback it was really helpful

Hey Thats a really cool story and interesting. It hooked me in straight away. Its a topic nobody else would have usually thought about doing. Well done & Good luck

Hey Your story really pulls the reader in and makes them want to read more like me. I usually find storys really hard to get into but yours was so ...

hey this is a beautiful poem and it makes you feel what the blind girl is going through.I love the rhyming and think that you have got real talent to ...

As I awoke I remembered last night and got up to call Mum “Hello, Auckland Hospital how may I help you” “Hi I called earlier this morning about Kate Dancombe. ...

Thanxs 4 everybodys reviews i kinda knew that i wouldnt really get good coments back as this is m first story that i have submitted but thanxs

Hae this has got potential plz keep writing as your first sentence drew me in.

I woke to the sound of a scream. It must be Mum I thought. She was heavily pregnant. I ran to her room and she was knelling on the floor ...

"What do you think you are doing "I'm leaving, i cant stand you and Dad fighting its all you ever do and you never care about me" I shrieked back ...

Thanks Hae great start it pulls you in and wants to make you read more