lakegirls

I really liked this story, it was a good short read. I thought it was cool how she sprouted wing's i was expecting one of her legs to be gone! ...

Wow, this story had a lot of emotion. One thing though i noticed is you switched from first person to third person point of view. So I took my pocket ...

Your right, this story is a bit strange but in a good way. I wish you had to put in more detail to what had happened though, we don't really ...

Hi, Reading this made me feel sad, since Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows was the last book. No offense but I hate when people write other endings for stories. ...

Hi, This wasn't really my type of story, but you had nice dialogue in it. I think it was a bit too choppy though, going from character to character, there ...

I'm not very good with critiques but I thought your story was very powerful like a lot of other people said. Also (a lot of people said this too) about ...

So, I liked the idea of the story but i think it should be in third person point of view not first, or leave it in first just change it ...