-
Re: Story Characters
I love the perspective in the first one! *dies* You also have a pretty good grasp on musculature. Nice job :)
Oct 29, 2010 -
Re: de artuate
Thanks, both of you! :D NixonBlitzen: the dangling 's' was meant to convey a sort of break in thought, like "you cut open a rabbit..." was the main point, and ...
Sep 25, 2010 -
Re: Rate the Avatar Above You! [4]
9/10 Preeeeetty and colorful. :D
Sep 21, 2010 -
Re: [September Contest] The Third Man
I found this adorable. It has this sweet innocence to it, and a very nostalgic but clear look through a child's eyes. No real critique, unfortunately, but I really enjoyed ...
Sep 19, 2010 -
Re: de artuate
Thank you for reading :D (P.S. Non-capitalization is indeed intentional :)) ********* i spend too much eyesight nowadays staring at the fluorescent glare the ceiling-light leaves on my puke-green-whit
Sep 19, 2010 -
Re: The Decline
Firstly, this is lovely. :D Your images are brilliant, and perfectly portray that slipping, sliding, melting feeling which is given solidity by the cement and wax metaphors. I haven't said ...
Sep 6, 2010 -
Re: Rach-and-Ribbit Reviews, Inc.
(That cat-frog might be the most disarmingly appealing gift for her on this thread, I think :D)
Sep 6, 2010 -
Re: My Pencil
Hehe. This is very cute :D Pencil personification -- very cool. The rhyme flows pretty naturally and the different images and parallels -- Israel's and France's greetings, for instance -- ...
Sep 5, 2010 -
Re: Cold Blooded
You have a strong grasp on theme here, and the images you use are also very strong. However, I'd suggest using a bit more. Poetry is, of course, extremely subjective ...
Sep 1, 2010 -
Re: Butterflies
I found this beautiful. I couldn't say exactly why, it's hard to pinpoint that in a poem sometimes, but I really did. I'd love to see it in a bit ...
Sep 1, 2010 -
Re: Rach-and-Ribbit Reviews, Inc.
I just want to say, you are a freaking superhero. :D
Aug 30, 2010 -
Re: Shotgun Lullabies
Thank you so very much for the comment! :D Just to clarify, Tyler didn't have much motivation for the road trip, aside from that Rick is his best friend, and ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: Shotgun Lullabies
This is an expansion of a flash fiction I wrote awhile ago. It's only a first/second draft (depending on whether you think the flash was a first draft) so I'd ...
Aug 21, 2010 -
Re: Rach-and-Ribbit Reviews, Inc.
....rain check on that? :D
Aug 19, 2010 -
Re: Ahoy!
I'm hopping into the thievery! (edit) ....except that I've clearly killed it, which makes me a massive failure as a hijacker. Not even time for a ransom.
Aug 19, 2010
